Hump Day Hook 6/12

Today’s hook comes from my WIP, The Last Hour of Gann, and honestly, we’re coming to the end of what I feel I can post without giving away too much of the story, so this may be the last hook from Gann. We’ll see how it goes. Anyhoo, the excerpt opens with Amber waiting quietly at camp while Meoraq meditates somewhere in the wilderness. She is not afraid to be alone. She has no premonition of danger. She does not know she is being watched…

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It really wasn’t very windy today. The smoke from her fire made a strong, obvious arrow in the sky, pointing right at her camp. These raiders had come a long way from their usual route to investigate. There were only five of them now; the other six remained with the slaves they had acquired at the nearby city of Praxas, where they had traded bundles of dried phesok for the cast-off daughters of those who had them to spare. The raiders were certainly not above attacking Praxas (two of their number even now had been taken as young boys during such raids), but when trade was good, it behooved them all to use diplomatic measures.

Now they had spied a potential new target and so they came, crawling on their bellies as soon as they were near enough to see the lone silhouette at the glowing coals, blades out and ready. They had expected a warrior—it was always wisest to expect the worst, although far more common to find instead some fool youth who fancied himself a hunter or, ha, a raider—and they were ten body-lengths from the fire before they realized, almost in unison, that they had no idea what sat at camp before them.

They stopped, exchanging questioning glances in the silent way of pack predators. The man who was their leader considered for perhaps eight heartbeats. Then he gestured with his sword and the crawl resumed. The essential meat of the matter had not changed. Regardless of what form it took, this was prey. That it was also strange might or might not mean greater profit, but one could only know that once the prey was taken.

So they took it.



10 responses to “Hump Day Hook 6/12

  1. They took her? but she didn’t even feel she was in danger… you used the word “behooves” one of my favs but not often used to best effect

  2. Pingback: He ain’t nothin’, he’s my brother – #8Sunday « Deb E.

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